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Re: Screenplay Teazer
Posted: 12 Aug 06 1:09 AM
You'd better. Can you imagine if Rock was the one to tell the story? He'd never get two facts in chronilogical order!
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Re: Screenplay Teazer
Posted: 12 Aug 06 2:41 AM
give rock a few beers and his head clears

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Re: Screenplay Teazer
Posted: 12 Aug 06 11:00 PM
Give him a tomatto, and his bowel clears...
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Re: Screenplay Teazer
Posted: 18 Aug 06 2:01 PM

Schultz sitting at a nearby table alone watches a drunken sailor paw Bar Girl2 as he sips his beer

 

BARGIRL2

(annoyed)

Stop I have to get back to work

 

SAILOR

(drunk, heavy accent)

Aw, take the night off sweetie

 

Sailor grabs bargirl2 breast

 

BARGIRL2

(slaps Sailor angrily)

Stop that, let me go

 

Sailor grabs hold of her more violently

 

HAMMER SCHULTZ

(to sailor)

Let her go

 

Sailor enraged by Schultz butting in

 

SAILOR

Maybe you need to stay out of my business

 

HAMMER SCHULTZ

(stands)

I said let her go

 

SAILOR

(laughing evily)

You want her then take her

 

Sailor stands and pushes BarGirl2 violently towards Schultz. Schultz tosses a table out of his way as he catches the woman, and the Sailor hits him.Schultz stands back up with blood running down from his nose and lip. Bar is quiet and 3rd Platoon stares at the event.

 

CLAYPOOLE

(whispers)

I got 50 kroner on Hammer

 

BASS

I don't make sucker bets.

 

Sailor throws a punch. Schultz blocks and grabs arm and throws Sailor onto table smashing it, still holding arm.

 

HAMMER SCHULTZ

12 sounds like a good number

 

SAILOR

12?

 

HAMMER SCHULTZ

Yea that's how many bones I am gonna break

(aplies pressure, you hear a very audible bone snapping, man screaming)

 

Big Barb storms out of kitchen wielding a club, crowd moves out of her way, Sailor screaming in pain for help

 

BIG BARB

(to Bass)

Cholly! Cholly! Call off your maweeeeen

 

BASS

(yelling)

Lance Corporal! AT-EASE!

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Re: Screenplay Teazer
Posted: 18 Aug 06 2:16 PM
I've gotta say, I really like it.  Especially with Claypoole and Bass betting on it. 

"Border line, dead inside, I don't mind, falling to pieces, Count me in, violent, Let's begin, feeding the sickness, How do I simplify Dislocate--The enemy's on the way"
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